The Kiss by Mike Fraser

It's Valentine's Eve and a lady has a secret to tell her boyfriend who in turn has something he wants to share with her.
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Comments: 7
  • #1

    Isabella Tellez Garita (Monday, 23 July 2012 13:03)

    Yeah, that's funny.

  • #2

    Ian (Monday, 23 July 2012 17:34)

    I really enjoyed the tone of this. My only issue was the very end. I thought the guy would get mad at her when she told him the unfortunate news.

  • #3

    Mike Fraser (Monday, 23 July 2012 20:38)

    That you for the nice comment. I actually left the ending like that as audience reaction ending, an ending to ponder on. Thinking that the screenplay needed to be a love story, the actual ending was where the man says "Marry Me". When I found out it didn't have to be a love story, I decided to do a quick re-write and add my original ending to it, which is what we have now.

  • #4

    Ivy (Tuesday, 24 July 2012 01:24)

    Awesome! Would have given the characters names, though.

  • #5

    Mike Morucci (Tuesday, 24 July 2012 04:32)

    You got me! I laughed! I always love a twist.

  • #6

    Mike Fraser (Wednesday, 25 July 2012 06:24)

    Glad it made you laugh, then the twist worked.

  • #7

    Craig (Friday, 27 July 2012 18:35)

    Saying "it's not your" is good but for her to smile and then still Kiss??? Also the weather would be big issue you could do lightning and thunder with SX but rain in a cafe setting would be hard.