Never forgotten by J Mockridge

She may have lived her life, but she never forgot her first love.
Adobe Acrobat Document 4.8 KB

Write a comment

Comments: 6
  • #1

    Jayne Lake (Monday, 23 July 2012 13:07)

    I want to watch this although in my minds eye I'm already weeping.

  • #2

    Nigel Sheppard (Wednesday, 25 July 2012 18:39)

    I loved this right through to the end, but I would have liked a different ending where she dismissed the man she'd spent her life with.

  • #3

    Craig (Friday, 27 July 2012 13:32)

    Don't see why you have this ending? But I like your idea but is it well enough written, as you only describe what is in the pictures. How would we see them appear?

    But the big thing is that your kiss is very incidental, blink and you'll miss it, literally.

  • #4

    J Mockridge (Friday, 27 July 2012 17:30)

    Thank you for the comments. I tried a different angle with this entry - the photographs tell a life story. And yes, the kiss was brief, but the time on screen would be sufficient. I wanted to give an alternative option to filming, more towards the visual.

  • #5

    Louise Martens (Thursday, 02 August 2012 01:07)

    I like your script, it tells a very strong visual story. A lovely idea, which is also (at least in my relatively inexperienced knowledge of screenplays) well written.

  • #6

    James (Sunday, 05 August 2012 00:14)

    Thanks Louise.