Gumshoe by Fraser May

Kate is searching for her Birth Mother, but will her obsessive quest destroy what is also precious - the love of her fiancee Andy?
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Comments: 11
  • #1

    Steven JC Johnson (Friday, 20 July 2012 19:51)

    That was a good read. I hope Kate's toe-kissing does the trick... :)

  • #2

    Tom Etherington (Saturday, 21 July 2012 07:41)

    Strong character based narrative. Good read

  • #3

    Elizabeth Swan (Sunday, 22 July 2012 05:59)

    Good story - well written.

  • #4

    Isabella Tellez Garita (Sunday, 22 July 2012 11:27)

    Great story, excellent writing, surprising this didn't make it at least on to long list.

  • #5

    Layla (Sunday, 22 July 2012 14:36)

    Well done, Fraser. I felt afterwards her partner seems a nice guy and think he'd probably understand her predicament. I'd like to see more of this and see how that conflict would be explored. It's got a nice pace to it also.

  • #6

    Fraser (Sunday, 22 July 2012 19:07)

    isabella - thanks for your kind words . i was a bit dissapointed about not making it through but it is a bit of a lottery because one reader will love something that another will hate. Layla thanks also, i did write it with the idea of people wanting more but maybe that ewas its downfall!

  • #7

    Reg Lacey (Sunday, 22 July 2012 22:36)

    Just read this script. great little story. And it didnt make the top 500??? dont get it

  • #8

    Craig (Monday, 23 July 2012 09:59)

    Why have the bit with the letter? Only had 2 pages so move on quicker. Use the space you have to show more about Andy not liking her seach for her mother.

  • #9

    Fraser (Monday, 23 July 2012 11:15)

    Good point Craig. I guess I could have dropped that but it tied in with the imagery of the other 4 letters blue black pink and white. Might try and rewrite it without That thanks

  • #10

    Nigel Sheppard (Monday, 23 July 2012 15:21)

    Solid effort, unlucky for not making it through.

  • #11

    Mitch (Tuesday, 24 July 2012 20:20)

    Proof once again that there is some rock solid stuff in the Near Kisses pile. Well done.