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Paul Holbrook (Friday, 20 July 2012 16:27)
Nice idea this one. The feelings of the main characters came across as a little muddled to me, but I really like the idea.
Jaye (Friday, 20 July 2012 17:40)
That was fun and totally unexpected. If I was Tara I would have still kicked the ref in the shin!
Steven JC Johnson (Friday, 20 July 2012)
A good, swift read. It feels like it was written swiftly, too, as there are one or two spelling mistakes. Not a criticism, though, as it evoked a great football match.
As Jaye said, though, Tara should have kicked the ref in the nads and shoved the whistle up his bum - after kissing it - the whistle, that is, not his bum... crikey. :)
Stephen (Friday, 20 July 2012 19:26)
A fun read. I could see this film being made. The first stage 200 must be good to beat this one!
You could turn this into a 5 minute short film.
Kit (Saturday, 21 July 2012 00:08)
Agree that Tara should be more outraged. She seems to switch too easily.
Aaron (Saturday, 21 July 2012 12:59)
A really nice idea, I could actually imagine it as a short film.
Layla (Sunday, 22 July 2012 14:22)
Aside from pitying the ref in the beginning, maybe there could have been another beat of action/reason why Tara could like the ref before he starts punishing her. Otherwise, loved this idea. The
image of the uncouth tracksuits was great - not your typical romantic Valentine's get up!
Nigel Sheppard (Wednesday, 25 July 2012 16:13)
This would be an absolute killer to make, but the script is fun and lively.