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Milethia (Saturday, 28 July 2012 22:23)
Nice use of Valentine's day to show a couple's relationship at its end.
You name your characters YOUNG WOMAN and YOUNG MAN and then refer to them as MAN and WOMAN when they speak. I always think it's best to name your characters.
There is a sense that something has occurred between the two, though the issue isn't verbalised, which is good, and I like the gift that marks his, I guess, betrayal of the girl.
Bottom of page one - I think it's a spell check error - it says 'hearths' when it should read 'hearts'.
All the best with your writing.
Ana (Monday, 30 July 2012 22:27)
Thank you so much Milethia for your comment. I am happy and so excited to receive a feedback and I will definitely take it in consideration.