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Mike Morucci (Monday, 23 July 2012 20:13)
I wrote this is script in one day and I've learned I really need to let things incubate and allow more time.
After posting I've re-read many times and see where I could have used actions (just signs the form instead of saying "I'll sign"; gently returns the rose instead of saying "No") and taken time to
have a better final line of dialogue.
Looking forward to feedback from my fellow writers!
Mike Fraser (Monday, 23 July 2012 20:33)
That was a very touch story that welled my eyes up. Giving the amount of space to write the screenplay I think you did a great job conveying a very sad but heartfelt story. I do agree with what you
said about the actions. Sometimes actions do speak louder that words, but I felt the dialogue in those scenes didn't detract from the overall story. Good work.