The Special One by Dennis Hurleston

Not even a gorgeous girlfriend and Valentine's Day could keep Danny away from his beloved Chelsea's FA cup tie......... could they?
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    Rachel McAdam (Friday, 10 August 2012 22:06)

    Really enjoyed this but wasn't too sure if Danny should be involved in the conversation about the cat at the start - surely he'd be a little concerned if the cat was the same colour as his girlfriend's - and maybe cutting the dialogue might make it a more subtle foreshadowing. Was also thrown by the order of emotions crossing Danny's face at the end - nit-picking I know - it might read better if they are described in the order they come - but well done.