Tied Up by Christopher D Bacon Draft 1
No Second draft - see writers comments below
Draft One Producers Development Notes for the author
1. We liked this script but felt that the title didn’t quite match the story. Consider changing it – we get the play on the man being tied up and the flowers being tied up but sounds like the
script should be about bondage!
2. You could tighten your scene direction and take out some of the lines that are not moving the story forward - for example – “at a table you have to book months in advance when you’re not a somebody”.
3. Note to filmmaker – this story is strong enough to take place in a café, or else elegant surroundings if you cannot get a swanky restaurant. If you like the essence of the story speak to the screenwriter about how it can play out in a setting you can get access to.
Have your say, what do you think?