That Good Night by Kenneth J Lemm Draft 2
Draft Two Comments... have YOUR say!
That Good Night by Kenneth J Lemm Draft 1
Draft One Producers Development Notes for the author
1. We liked this script and felt it denotes a strong emotional scene that many can relate to. However, we feel that you need to set up why the daughter disappeared from this man’s life in the
first place. What drove them apart?
2. Structural point - Would the daughter send Valentine’s flowers to a father and turn up later? Were the flowers a way of denoting Valentine’s Day – in which case how can you use that as a way in to set up why this man has no contact with this family. Perhaps seeing others with Valentine’s flowers sets him on a rant as to why his family have forgotten him?
3. Think about whether you need to have the flashbacks. When a filmmaker reads the script they will start assessing what they need to source to get it made, the flashbacks – although the offer an insight into the man and his life – are almost a film in themselves.
Have your say, what do you think?