Jealous Making by K Satchwell Draft 3
Draft Three Comments... have YOUR say!
Jealous Making by K Satchwell Draft 2
Jealous Making by K Satchwell Draft 1
Draft One Producers Development Notes for the author
1. We liked this script, liked the idea of Jealous Making but felt we needed to understand set up from the beginning. Although there is a line that says "Hi Fake Boyfriend" is this the best way
to introduce the set up?
2. We need to see more inventive ways of them trying to upset their respective partners. Make the fake relationship points higher density. We need to see more of them.
3. It is clear from your writing this isn’t their first fake date. We need to see something else going on as an under current to their Jealous Making. What if they are having a great time with each other and are actually falling in love but are so focused on pissing their ex off that they would rather choose that, over love? What if the last beat is this fake couple about to kiss authentically for the first time – but choose they go back to their phones when they beep? Think about how you can play with this situation and make the Jealous Making they are intent on almost seem redundant.
Have your say, what do you think?