I'll Stand by You by Emily Salter Draft 2
Draft Two Comments... have YOUR say!
I'll Stand by You by Emily Salter Draft 1
Draft One Producers Development Notes for the author
“I’ll Stand By You” has a potent emotional story at the centre of the script, and a small number of structural notes will help this play out with more potency and resonance;
1. The story may well work more efficiently told in a linear style. The current flashback scene is solid as written, but can be used to set up more story stakes. The rose works great as a visual representation of the date, and gives her something to look at later, but do we need to start the script on the date? This could be in a restaurant, or in Matt’s flat (see below) & means we can establish they have been seeing each other for some time (or at least more than once), that she really likes him and that she has something to tell him about her life that she’s nervous to tell. That something is that she is a single mother and acknowledges that most men would run at this point. This abandonment is her greatest fear. Then her phone rings and the narrative unfolds as written.
2. With this, when Matt does appear to have gone, she’s dejected and rejected in just the way she hoped not to be. This crucial imperfection of Matt’s, that he could run, needs to be built into his character. What about the situation means he’s a guy who would disappear without a word? If we see his flat, does it smack of a moneyed singleton, a boy with his expensive toys? Or perhaps it’s a simple misunderstanding about who has called? If he doesn’t know she’s a single mother, his mind could jump to any number of things before that eventuality...
3. So when he does come back, he needs to introduce himself to Lily. This is Hannah’s greatest hope, so will assuage her greatest fear. It shows he is committed to her and this
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