First, Last, Best by Jennifer Leigh Allen Draft 2
Draft Two Comments... have YOUR say!
First, Last, Best by Jennifer Leigh Allen Draft 1
Draft One Producers Development Notes for the author
1. Really think about these vignettes of her kisses. Do they powerfully describe her journey through life? Are they the best ones you can come up? Also strip out where you can
anything too repetitive Iike, 2 teenage sloppy kisses.
2. We felt the ending needed to be strengthened. How can that be done? Would it work if her date at the end was a woman? Or if it came full circle – she is kissing her child? That would mean falling in love with the boy is one vignette.
3. Read '60 Year Valentine' - how can you differentiate yourself from this script?
Have your say, what do you think?